Shadows dance across the wall and voices speak
This is their reality and their truth, their minds have no doubt
Their thought process is very weak
The world continues outside the cave
With its complex life and ever growing findings
One escaped and once introduced, the truth hit him like a wave
He was enlightened and free from is mental bindings
The Allegory is true for every being
We are all mentally controlled, limited and confined
They allow us to view what they want but we are never really seeing
When we accept the truth, only then can we see where we were once blind
Question all that is around you
and expand your point of view
Their thought process is very weak
The world continues outside the cave
With its complex life and ever growing findings
One escaped and once introduced, the truth hit him like a wave
He was enlightened and free from is mental bindings
The Allegory is true for every being
We are all mentally controlled, limited and confined
They allow us to view what they want but we are never really seeing
When we accept the truth, only then can we see where we were once blind
Question all that is around you
and expand your point of view
Good structure! My only criticism is the last stanza being a bit wordy, but even then it doesn't distract from the poem. You have a good understanding and it shows!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your first four lines the best since you opened strong. You were direct and used a lot of imagery.
ReplyDeleteReally enjoyed your sonnet Valerie, good use of creative diction that appropriately follows the sonnet structure throughout. I especially like the final couplet.
ReplyDeleteGreat structure and diction. I like these two lines the best:
ReplyDelete"They allow us to view what they want but we are never really seeing
When we accept the truth, only then can we see where we were once blind".Overall, great job!><
I loved your diction. It was great. Good job val :)
ReplyDeletegreat word choice and rhyming1 it definately a sonnet.
ReplyDeleteNice job! I like the first stanze definitely! Also great word choice :) I like it!!
ReplyDeleteReally good job! The structure is good and the rhymes make you think and the overall content is enlightening :)
ReplyDeleteWow this was really well done! You are a very strong writer and it shows by how powerful and evocative this sonnet was! Jut remember to use iambic pantameter!
ReplyDeleteoooh Val your deep! great job! i can tell you really understood the Allegory on a different level.
ReplyDeleteNicely done. Your structure seems well-made. Thx for commenting on my sonnet too btw.
ReplyDeleteGood Job. Like how it flowed.
ReplyDeleteplease comment on mine too.
http://pkimrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/allegory-of-caves-sonnet.html
Your syntax and diction were very good. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThe last two lines of the third stanza are comparatively long, but otherwise it flows well. You have some tricky rhymes in there too ("view" and "you") that indicate you put a lot of thought into this. Nice sonnet!
ReplyDeleteI like the line about the truth hitting him like a wave. Goes well with the actually experience in the allegory. I think on line 8 "is" is supposed to be "his". Some lines are a little long but you wrote it well and there are a lot of connections to the allegory.
ReplyDeleteYou have 14 line, a rhyming pattern, but of course (like most of the class and me)the iambic pentameter is missing. Good job.
This is deffinetly one of the better poems I have read. I love the imagery you used. Great job! Could you please comment to my blog as well?
ReplyDeleteAwesome job Val. I like the rhyming and structure.
ReplyDeletegreat job last lines were really well chosen and could ya comment on my sonnet too
ReplyDeleteGood work, i enjoyed reading your sonnet
ReplyDeleteI like it ! I like it ! My favorite lines were the last couplet. Interesting point of view (in a good way). Well done though.
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